a secret
on the edge of a secret
i fly
i can try to close some part of me,
but a single laugh will open it
as quickly as i shut
and a moment
can whisper a pathway
i want you to know
everything
i’m an inch from telling you
i think of you
© r.e.l. 12/7/10
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It is amazing
how so little words
can carry such an extension
of crystal love…
December 7, 2010 at 9:30 am
yes, agreed. i can spend an entire day and 30 pages worth writing and editing down to a few words.. and then i know it’s perfect. thanks for noticing
December 7, 2010 at 9:37 am
how are you?
I come cross this piece, truly love it.
well done keep it up…
hope to see you in the poets rally or potluck poetry this week, deadline is Wednesday.
December 7, 2010 at 5:05 pm
thank you.. this one wrote itself.
it’s been great to be a part of your group of poets. i plan to continue.. i will submit by tomorrow. thanks for heads up
December 7, 2010 at 6:08 pm
thanks…
see you soon….
Happy Wednesday!
December 8, 2010 at 5:47 am
jingle, did you mean by today wednesday? i’m a little confused since you submitted my other poem for this week already. or did you mean to submit this new for week 35 due by next wednesday? i’ll get the hang of this soon!
December 8, 2010 at 5:50 am
What a beautiful write. its so close to my heart…love it
December 7, 2010 at 11:43 pm
mine too
thanks for responding…i’ll check out your blog now ..
December 8, 2010 at 4:50 am
I love this, I get this, it’s just wonderful.
December 8, 2010 at 8:55 am
yes! me too…
December 8, 2010 at 11:00 am
cute and lovely! mine’s here- http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/01/15/head/
December 8, 2010 at 9:31 pm
cool, i’ll check it out. thanks for your comment
December 8, 2010 at 9:34 pm
Thanks for linking …
Happy Thursday!
you write well,
keep it up.
A++
December 9, 2010 at 8:30 am
thank you, jingle. i appreciate your keeping up with my writing…
your finding me out her in cyberspace means alot. you have a wonderful group of people…
December 9, 2010 at 9:10 am
Few words express such depth. Beautiful write.
December 9, 2010 at 8:40 pm
yes, lots to be left to the imagination and uniqueness of every reader
December 10, 2010 at 6:48 am
This is glorious…the edge of a secret…and once shared, it’s a secret no more. I loved this!
My potluck: so maybe
December 10, 2010 at 4:51 pm
Yes, once shared it changes but it was always a secret
December 10, 2010 at 5:44 pm
Great short poem packed with all great lines!
December 12, 2010 at 4:58 am
thank you…. it wrote itself..
December 12, 2010 at 1:05 pm
Well crafted poem!
A small suggestion- lose the last line and it sounds even better.
March 7, 2011 at 10:03 am
well i thought of that… to make it more mysterious. but then i thought it added some boldness (with a simple powerful statement) to just say it at the end… i like it this way best
March 7, 2011 at 11:22 am