star on a distant paradise
where are you now
in this moment, i ask
climbing a ladder to a distant cloud
that only i know…
floating on a bubble under a wave of life?
you are crazy
with the mystery you breathe
you are the pure energy
of love
… fire mixed with water
and raindrops inside sand
you are tears and joy forever intertwined
like a bird not knowing his wings
still… after all
you know you are
the one who saved me from a distant paradise
and you are true
© r.e.l. 11/4/10
image nightbird2
Posted on Poetry Potluck 7/10-7/17/11 on Jingle Poetry
splendid poem. very beautifully written. the pic added to its beauty.
November 4, 2010 at 4:06 am
thank you… after writing it, i finished it off with the vibe of the picture
November 4, 2010 at 7:09 am
“you are tears and joy forever intertwined
like a bird not knowing his wings”
…very moving.
This is an exceptionally written poem
July 11, 2011 at 7:16 am
thanks, david…
July 11, 2011 at 7:18 am
An eloquent piece of poetry. Very moving and beautiful.
July 11, 2011 at 7:22 am
thanks, charles.. a beautiful moment when i wrote this 8 months ago…
July 11, 2011 at 7:24 am
lovely conclusion,
July 11, 2011 at 9:31 am
thanks, jingle..
July 11, 2011 at 3:39 pm
Thanks for visiting http://shawnbird.com/2011/07/10/fire-of-you/
I’m intrigued with this notion of the subject saving the narrator from distant paradise. It’s rather paradoxical, considering we generally don’t want to be saved from paradise. Hmm. Pondering…
July 11, 2011 at 3:36 pm
the paradise was a type of escape.. glad you enjoyed and see the paradox (i love to create double meaning…)
July 11, 2011 at 3:39 pm
Very deep words, and filled with loving imagery and of gratitudes. A lovely write.
July 12, 2011 at 12:39 pm
thanks for commenting…
July 12, 2011 at 12:49 pm
thanks for your comment @boutman “Breath of a nightbird”… perfect. thanks for passing around twitter
July 12, 2011 at 12:51 pm
thanks @xatstilo for featuring me in your daily newsletter AvantGardePoetry http://paper.li/xatstilo/1306784513. much appreciated for passing my poem around. glad you liked it
July 12, 2011 at 12:53 pm
Fabulous imagery! Absolutely moving and a tinge of intensity I felt.
My poem ~ A Poetic World
July 13, 2011 at 8:25 am
I enjoyed it very much… its so beautiful… and your picturisation in the lines are so perfect…
‘you are the pure energy
of love
… fire mixed with water
and raindrops inside sand’
Thanks for joining in the Poetry Potluck WK 43 which I am hosting for the first time… hope you have liked it too…. and wish to see you again…
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/07/whispers-cuckoos-song-and-smell-of-love.html
At Twitter @VerseEveryDay
July 14, 2011 at 9:46 am
thank you.. yes, the i love the bird of paradise flower..
July 16, 2011 at 11:30 am
a beautiful poem – thank you … tony
July 19, 2011 at 6:37 am
glad you enjoyed…
July 19, 2011 at 6:52 am