. . . . . . . did you know that i sit next to you now in the tiniest house of time?

a deeper order

create me like i created you
in the space
which lies deeper than you know

it is where, you see,
i first found
the concept of your
decision
to think outside your unexpected life
and roar instead

impactful.
i sighed

© r.e.l. 5/18/11

Posted on Thursday Poet’s Rally 5/19-5/25/11 on Promising Poets

… thank you, Promising Poets, for the Celebrate Poet of Summer Award!

… thank you, Promising Poets, for the Perfect Poet award!  I cherish this community of poets and am honored… For next week, I nominate deadpoet88.  -robin

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52 responses

  1. love it.

    short, focused, and beautiful. :)

    May 18, 2011 at 10:51 pm

    • robin

      thank you, miss night owl :) i wrote it just for you

      May 18, 2011 at 10:58 pm

  2. very, very beautiful robin. your poems are so very beautiful and amazing.

    May 19, 2011 at 12:43 am

    • robin

      you are such a great support, trisha. thanks for all your kind words

      May 19, 2011 at 6:30 am

  3. this was well written, expressive and deep..

    May 19, 2011 at 4:40 am

    • robin

      a deeper order.. ;) thanks for your comments

      May 19, 2011 at 6:30 am

  4. Beautiful, Robin… or beautiful Robin. Both work.

    May 19, 2011 at 5:37 am

    • robin

      thank you usual, thanks blake

      May 19, 2011 at 6:31 am

  5. simple and elegant :)

    May 19, 2011 at 7:54 am

    • robin

      i like the photo… so glad i found the lion in the mist. thanks for your comment :)

      May 19, 2011 at 8:06 am

  6. Deeply layered and thought provoking.

    May 19, 2011 at 8:30 am

    • robin

      happy that you enjoyed…

      May 19, 2011 at 4:42 pm

  7. I love the photo. I didn’t see the lion at first. It was only on second studying that it came into view.

    Beautifully expressed. Thanks for sharing.

    May 19, 2011 at 9:23 am

    • Oops! I meant lioness!
      (Smiling…I really must change these glasses)

      May 19, 2011 at 9:25 am

      • robin

        Yes lioness. I made sure of that. And one that wasn’t roaring so that it’s only implied…

        May 19, 2011 at 11:43 am

    • robin

      lion in the mist created such a dreamlike moment for me and these words…glad you liked ;)

      May 19, 2011 at 11:42 am

  8. beautiful. love the photo. great write

    May 19, 2011 at 1:07 pm

    • robin

      thanks for stopping by

      May 19, 2011 at 4:41 pm

  9. Iris D

    Interesting and insightful. I really liked this.

    Iris
    http://poetpost.wordpress.com

    May 19, 2011 at 2:58 pm

    • robin

      thanks much…

      May 19, 2011 at 4:39 pm

  10. NICE THANK YOU

    May 19, 2011 at 9:51 pm

    • robin

      my pleasure

      May 19, 2011 at 9:59 pm

  11. Wow i was dumbfound after this..
    It did great a huge impact on me..

    Alcina

    May 19, 2011 at 11:41 pm

    • robin

      me too.. thanks for your comment

      May 20, 2011 at 6:08 am

  12. coolly different (my word cooly) lol
    enjoy the rally!

    http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/05/20/the-spirit-of-the-sand-boa/

    May 20, 2011 at 6:23 am

    • robin

      the lioness leads the way…

      May 20, 2011 at 6:29 am

  13. Love the cyclic nature of the first two lines, the idea of being made by the one you made. Such a brilliant poem filled with mystery, really made me ponder. Adored it.
    The Lonely Recluse.

    May 20, 2011 at 4:49 pm

    • robin

      it is powerful to make sense of your inner dialog and ask your soul which parts are created by which parts

      May 21, 2011 at 10:47 am

  14. Wonderful written, I love the feel of the poem and of the accompanying image. Great job!

    May 21, 2011 at 12:25 am

    • robin

      thank you… Appreciate your comment

      May 21, 2011 at 1:22 pm

  15. I’m not quite sure whether this is Buddhist or Theistic – but it touches the profound.

    May 21, 2011 at 8:15 am

    • robin

      glad you can relate.. my goal is just to write with mystery and no rules so that the words have different meaning to each

      May 21, 2011 at 1:26 pm

  16. Very good. We create our own circumstances with our attitude and thought forms.

    May 21, 2011 at 8:31 am

    • robin

      yes we do and it’s a beautiful thing…

      May 21, 2011 at 1:27 pm

  17. I love the feline feeling to this poem…and the strong female depiction in the wording.

    May 21, 2011 at 10:15 am

    • robin

      It’s funny, I was thinking of a male lion as I wrote but knew I needed a female lion photo. a mixture of the feminine and masculine

      May 21, 2011 at 1:30 pm

  18. vivid and mystical!

    Enjoyed it’s simple and complex theme

    -poetryroad

    May 21, 2011 at 11:35 pm

    • robin

      the best kind . thx for visiting

      May 22, 2011 at 6:33 am

  19. Loved it! short and beautiful! your thoughts make the reader a poet :)

    May 23, 2011 at 8:14 pm

    • robin

      thank you, how sweet… it is my imagination that whoever reads, feels the poetic vibe….

      May 23, 2011 at 8:16 pm

  20. an enjoyable and thoughtful read – thanks for sharing

    May 25, 2011 at 7:07 pm

    • robin

      thx, always a thought. glad you enjoyed

      May 26, 2011 at 6:50 am

  21. Love this. It says everything it needs to say in just a few words. Well done.

    May 28, 2011 at 11:34 am

    • robin

      thanks, shirley. i agree too.. one of my favorites…

      May 28, 2011 at 12:00 pm

  22. What a powerful piece! Very beautifully and aptly written. I get from this beauty that
    “instant knowing” is a profound sledgehammer. You convey this beautifully!

    May 30, 2011 at 12:39 pm

    • robin

      so glad you enjoyed… instant knowing.. ;)

      May 30, 2011 at 10:07 pm

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  24. robin

    thank you, promising poets.. i’m always honored and surprised to get awards. great community

    June 5, 2011 at 10:01 am

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    • robin

      gladly!

      June 15, 2011 at 8:20 am

  26. create me like i created you…. fabulous.

    June 15, 2011 at 10:20 am

    • robin

      the mystery of the mind

      June 15, 2011 at 10:28 am

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