a deeper order
create me like i created you
in the space
which lies deeper than you know
it is where, you see,
i first found
the concept of your
decision
to think outside your unexpected life
and roar instead
impactful.
i sighed
© r.e.l. 5/18/11
Posted on Thursday Poet’s Rally 5/19-5/25/11 on Promising Poets
… thank you, Promising Poets, for the Celebrate Poet of Summer Award!
… thank you, Promising Poets, for the Perfect Poet award! I cherish this community of poets and am honored… For next week, I nominate deadpoet88. -robin
love it.
short, focused, and beautiful.
May 18, 2011 at 10:51 pm
thank you, miss night owl
i wrote it just for you
May 18, 2011 at 10:58 pm
very, very beautiful robin. your poems are so very beautiful and amazing.
May 19, 2011 at 12:43 am
you are such a great support, trisha. thanks for all your kind words
May 19, 2011 at 6:30 am
this was well written, expressive and deep..
May 19, 2011 at 4:40 am
a deeper order..
thanks for your comments
May 19, 2011 at 6:30 am
Beautiful, Robin… or beautiful Robin. Both work.
May 19, 2011 at 5:37 am
thank you usual, thanks blake
May 19, 2011 at 6:31 am
simple and elegant
May 19, 2011 at 7:54 am
i like the photo… so glad i found the lion in the mist. thanks for your comment
May 19, 2011 at 8:06 am
Deeply layered and thought provoking.
May 19, 2011 at 8:30 am
happy that you enjoyed…
May 19, 2011 at 4:42 pm
I love the photo. I didn’t see the lion at first. It was only on second studying that it came into view.
Beautifully expressed. Thanks for sharing.
May 19, 2011 at 9:23 am
Oops! I meant lioness!
(Smiling…I really must change these glasses)
May 19, 2011 at 9:25 am
Yes lioness. I made sure of that. And one that wasn’t roaring so that it’s only implied…
May 19, 2011 at 11:43 am
lion in the mist created such a dreamlike moment for me and these words…glad you liked
May 19, 2011 at 11:42 am
beautiful. love the photo. great write
May 19, 2011 at 1:07 pm
thanks for stopping by
May 19, 2011 at 4:41 pm
Interesting and insightful. I really liked this.
Iris
http://poetpost.wordpress.com
May 19, 2011 at 2:58 pm
thanks much…
May 19, 2011 at 4:39 pm
NICE THANK YOU
May 19, 2011 at 9:51 pm
my pleasure
May 19, 2011 at 9:59 pm
Wow i was dumbfound after this..
It did great a huge impact on me..
Alcina
May 19, 2011 at 11:41 pm
me too.. thanks for your comment
May 20, 2011 at 6:08 am
coolly different (my word cooly) lol
enjoy the rally!
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/05/20/the-spirit-of-the-sand-boa/
May 20, 2011 at 6:23 am
the lioness leads the way…
May 20, 2011 at 6:29 am
Love the cyclic nature of the first two lines, the idea of being made by the one you made. Such a brilliant poem filled with mystery, really made me ponder. Adored it.
The Lonely Recluse.
May 20, 2011 at 4:49 pm
it is powerful to make sense of your inner dialog and ask your soul which parts are created by which parts
May 21, 2011 at 10:47 am
Wonderful written, I love the feel of the poem and of the accompanying image. Great job!
May 21, 2011 at 12:25 am
thank you… Appreciate your comment
May 21, 2011 at 1:22 pm
I’m not quite sure whether this is Buddhist or Theistic – but it touches the profound.
May 21, 2011 at 8:15 am
glad you can relate.. my goal is just to write with mystery and no rules so that the words have different meaning to each
May 21, 2011 at 1:26 pm
Very good. We create our own circumstances with our attitude and thought forms.
May 21, 2011 at 8:31 am
yes we do and it’s a beautiful thing…
May 21, 2011 at 1:27 pm
I love the feline feeling to this poem…and the strong female depiction in the wording.
May 21, 2011 at 10:15 am
It’s funny, I was thinking of a male lion as I wrote but knew I needed a female lion photo. a mixture of the feminine and masculine
May 21, 2011 at 1:30 pm
vivid and mystical!
Enjoyed it’s simple and complex theme
-poetryroad
May 21, 2011 at 11:35 pm
the best kind . thx for visiting
May 22, 2011 at 6:33 am
Loved it! short and beautiful! your thoughts make the reader a poet
May 23, 2011 at 8:14 pm
thank you, how sweet… it is my imagination that whoever reads, feels the poetic vibe….
May 23, 2011 at 8:16 pm
an enjoyable and thoughtful read – thanks for sharing
May 25, 2011 at 7:07 pm
thx, always a thought. glad you enjoyed
May 26, 2011 at 6:50 am
Love this. It says everything it needs to say in just a few words. Well done.
May 28, 2011 at 11:34 am
thanks, shirley. i agree too.. one of my favorites…
May 28, 2011 at 12:00 pm
What a powerful piece! Very beautifully and aptly written. I get from this beauty that
“instant knowing” is a profound sledgehammer. You convey this beautifully!
May 30, 2011 at 12:39 pm
so glad you enjoyed… instant knowing..
May 30, 2011 at 10:07 pm
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June 5, 2011 at 10:01 am
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gladly!
June 15, 2011 at 8:20 am
create me like i created you…. fabulous.
June 15, 2011 at 10:20 am
the mystery of the mind
June 15, 2011 at 10:28 am