create me like i created you
in the space
which lies deeper than you know
it is where, you see,
i first found
the concept of your
to think outside your unexpected life
and roar instead
© r.e.l. 5/18/11
Posted on Thursday Poet’s Rally 5/19-5/25/11 on Promising Poets
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… thank you, Promising Poets, for the Perfect Poet award! I cherish this community of poets and am honored… For next week, I nominate deadpoet88. -robin
52 thoughts on “a deeper order”
short, focused, and beautiful.
thank you, miss night owl 🙂 i wrote it just for you
very, very beautiful robin. your poems are so very beautiful and amazing.
you are such a great support, trisha. thanks for all your kind words
this was well written, expressive and deep..
a deeper order.. 😉 thanks for your comments
Beautiful, Robin… or beautiful Robin. Both work.
thank you usual, thanks blake
simple and elegant 🙂
i like the photo… so glad i found the lion in the mist. thanks for your comment 🙂
Deeply layered and thought provoking.
happy that you enjoyed…
I love the photo. I didn’t see the lion at first. It was only on second studying that it came into view.
Beautifully expressed. Thanks for sharing.
Oops! I meant lioness!
(Smiling…I really must change these glasses)
Yes lioness. I made sure of that. And one that wasn’t roaring so that it’s only implied…
lion in the mist created such a dreamlike moment for me and these words…glad you liked 😉
beautiful. love the photo. great write
thanks for stopping by
Interesting and insightful. I really liked this.
NICE THANK YOU
Wow i was dumbfound after this..
It did great a huge impact on me..
me too.. thanks for your comment
coolly different (my word cooly) lol
enjoy the rally!
the lioness leads the way…
Love the cyclic nature of the first two lines, the idea of being made by the one you made. Such a brilliant poem filled with mystery, really made me ponder. Adored it.
The Lonely Recluse.
it is powerful to make sense of your inner dialog and ask your soul which parts are created by which parts
Wonderful written, I love the feel of the poem and of the accompanying image. Great job!
thank you… Appreciate your comment
I’m not quite sure whether this is Buddhist or Theistic – but it touches the profound.
glad you can relate.. my goal is just to write with mystery and no rules so that the words have different meaning to each
Very good. We create our own circumstances with our attitude and thought forms.
yes we do and it’s a beautiful thing…
I love the feline feeling to this poem…and the strong female depiction in the wording.
It’s funny, I was thinking of a male lion as I wrote but knew I needed a female lion photo. a mixture of the feminine and masculine
vivid and mystical!
Enjoyed it’s simple and complex theme
the best kind . thx for visiting
Loved it! short and beautiful! your thoughts make the reader a poet 🙂
thank you, how sweet… it is my imagination that whoever reads, feels the poetic vibe….
an enjoyable and thoughtful read – thanks for sharing
thx, always a thought. glad you enjoyed
Love this. It says everything it needs to say in just a few words. Well done.
thanks, shirley. i agree too.. one of my favorites…
What a powerful piece! Very beautifully and aptly written. I get from this beauty that
“instant knowing” is a profound sledgehammer. You convey this beautifully!
so glad you enjoyed… instant knowing.. 😉
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create me like i created you…. fabulous.
the mystery of the mind